By Denise and Elisabeth
- Animals have their own rights
- We should not let these abusers off easily
- Prevent more abuse and abandonment of pets
- Animals are also living things, just like us
Animal abuse cases are significantly increasing. We see more and more pets being abandoned or abused. Could this be due to the punishments not being harsh enough?
Animals have thier own rights and these rights should not be violated. We should respect them as they too have feelings, just like us. Therefore, animal discrimination should not exist in this world. We are interdependent with the environment around us, and these pets also play a vital role in the ecosystem. Pets are not our slaves.
In addition, we should not give opportunities for animal abusers to get off scot free as this would encourage them to repeat their mistakes and inflict more pain on animals. Also, stiffer punishments will prevent more abuse and abandonment of pets and this will ensure the well being of our pets. Pets are not our slaves.
Animals are living things just like us and hence they should not become the victims of our cruelty. Animals need to be nutured with love and care like humans who as well need attention and care from their families. We need to accept animals in our society and treat them as one of us. Pets are not our slaves.
18th August 2009
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The introduction is good as it gives the audience an idea of what the talk is going to be about
ReplyDeleteI think the last paragraph is the most convinving throughout the whole speech. It expresses how animals too should be treated well and properly.
ReplyDeletei like the last paragraph,epecially the last line.i think it is very impactful.But you know animals also include the wild ones.but if u purposely focused on pets then its ok.good work.
ReplyDeleteThis is more like an exposition as it is convincing but lack of emotional words
ReplyDeleteGood introduction and the points are well -explained.The last paragraph summarises the whole speech-which is good.
ReplyDeletetoo much emphasis on the pets being slaves.They aren't. A few misconceptions. But, besides that, your language use is good.
ReplyDeleteIt is well written. I like the connections, such as "in addition" "therefore"which makes it more logical
ReplyDeleteGood points and elaboration.Very convincing
ReplyDeletei like the many emotive words used, like "harsh, aboandoned, slaves..". the starting and conclusion paragraphs sum up the whole sppech well.
ReplyDeleteyay, good job:)
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