-plant a tree
-walk instead of taking the vehicle
-temperature of the air-conditioner
Firstly, plant a tree. This could be easier than it sounds. Join or help out a local wildlife group and ask to plant a tree. Trees, when fully grown, will help keep the planet cooler. On the same point, you could protest against the demolition of the rainforests. This is the same principle, we need the trees to cool our planet and yet they are chopping them down to create roads or homes. Want to have a 'cooler' Earth?
Take your action now!
Secondly,something as simple as walking instead of taking the car will also help reduce pollution. As well as stopping pollution, you are giving yourself exercise, something important for our bodies. So the next time you get into your car, or your motorbike, think - do I have to make this journey by vehicle or can I walk?
Take your action now!
When you are at home, and feel a little warm. Choose a fan instead of air-conditioner. This can reduce the heat produced by the process of generating electricity for the use of air-conditioner . Through this way we can kill two birds in one stone--the cost on the electricity can be reduced as well.So try not to use the air-conditioner. The earth is having a fever.
Take your action now!
done by Wang Ye ,Wang Ruijia :)
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Powerful use of repetition "Let's Create Action Now!" Though I initially thought it would fit better if it had been at the end of each paragraph, realised that what you did seem fine too.
ReplyDeleteGood repetition of your motto, makes people really want to take action!!:)
ReplyDeleteIt is good that you are repeating certain sentences, such as "Let's create action now!" This punchline is very good. keep it up!
ReplyDeletehowever, the language that you use is too formal. there is no emotive words. what you are saying is very factual. you can add in your own experiences if you have any or write down an incident that had proved that earth should be saved, for example, the deaths of certain animals due to global warming.
"Let's creat action now" is a very affective repititon, and the points are also well-elaborated.
ReplyDeletegood repetition, "let's create action now"
ReplyDeletevey well done. i like your repitition. however, more elaboration could be made to show how planting of trees can help save the earth. you can also talk about how not lowering the temperature of the air-conditioner can help save cost on electricity which is another advantage.
ReplyDeleteGood, u attempted to make repetition in your speech :D. however, it sounds a little bit unsuitable with your paragraphing =(.
ReplyDeletethe second thing is that some of your idea is not relevant like "You may choose to take off your extra clothes instead of adjusting the temperature of the air-conditioner.". Are you sure you wanna "take off your clothes"?
Your motto was used effectively at the right parts.
ReplyDeleteUsing of "Let's create action now!" is effective, but the word "creat" in your paragraph can be replaced by "build", I think the tone would be stronger if use "build".
ReplyDeleteInstead of just repeating the sentence,maybe you can change it and link it coherently with the paragraphs above.
ReplyDeleteEffective repetition of your slogan & good elaboration of points (:
ReplyDeleteGood repetition,"let's create action now." The words are emotional. The suggestions are very appropriate too!
ReplyDeleteI like the repeated slogan, "Take action now!".
ReplyDeleteIt makes me feel like doing something about saving the earth. Also, the points are good and detailed
The reeitition of the phrase was good, and it caught my attention and briught across the point that you were trying to make.
ReplyDeleteThe third paragraph can be better. Maybe try phrasing the sentence so that you are not giving suggestions. (eg. You may choose to...) instead, I think you can say like. Use a fan instead of an air conditioner. I think it makes more impact than "you may want to use a fan". I hope you understand what im trying to say. (:
The repitition of "Let's creat action now" is quite effective.It make people really want to start to do it.And the 3 methods also make sense to me.
ReplyDeleteVery good!I like it.I find the repitition quit powerful and inspering.A;so, elaboration of the points is very clear and persuadable.
ReplyDeletethe sentence "Let's create action now!" is very prompting and the ways theny mentioned about how to do our parts to stop the global warming are practis are feasible.
ReplyDeleteHowever there are some sentences that were not clearly explained, like"When you are at home, and your getting a little warm"
it is good that you are repeating the phrase,"Let's create action now" however i feel that the language used is pretty formal.improve on language
ReplyDeleteThe repetition of the phrase "Let's create action now!" was good and your points were also well elaborated.
ReplyDeleteYour slogan is very effective and make others active. Also, your points are very close to our personal experiences.
ReplyDeletei think the slogan was really to the point.it sums the entire thing you want to say.good job
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