Saturday, August 8, 2009

Coping with stress in societ (amend by 18/8)

- optimistically to take difficulties
- stay socialized to communicate with others
- release your stress in correct ways
- keep having own hobbies
- have designated time to rest

We could sing when we feel stressed, but we should not make noise to irritate others when we want to release our stress; we could beat the sandbag when we feel stressed, but we should not hurt others when we want to release our stress; we could even go to see a counsellor when we feel stressed, yet we should not vandalize the public properties when we want to release our stress. No matter what we do, we must ensure that we are releasing our stress in correct ways.

When you find no ways to get rid of your stress, go ahead with your own hobbies. When you are focusing on onething, the others will roll out of your mind. For once, I was stress because the most important meeting for me was coming. I didn't box myself up in my office, instead I went for a fishing. After that, I found everything is easier and finally the meeting went out well. So find your own ways to enjoy yourselves. You definitely will realize the stress is already behind head.


done by. Xu Zhen & Sutong

20 comments:

  1. They should add in more emotive words.Must stress on the important points more.

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  2. you should elaborate your ideas more on how to cope with stress.

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  3. i agree withamnju, you should include more powerful words to grab the audience's attention.

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  4. add some personal experiences will help to reinforce your points

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  5. good repetition of "we could, but we should not"
    it emphasises all the dos and donts,
    however I feel that more explaination should be made about stress and elaborate more too ;)

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  6. I don't think the point(s) elaborated in your first paragraph are very relevant to the topic. You should give more pieces of advice on how to manage stress more effectively.

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  7. Good sentences in the first paragraph.but"You definitely will realize the stress is behind head already."Is it singlish??"already" should not be at the end?

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  8. Should add for emotive words. However, i find your way of wrinting unique:) great !!

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  9. The sentences are quite emotive and encourage ppl to relax. The skills used are not enough yet because it's lack of power attractive words. Moreover, you should elaborate your points more. :)

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  10. Nice repetition of words, and yeah pls try to use more emotive words to capture more attention. And also, my eyes widened when you said tear your own clothes. How about including more suggestions like going to talk to someone who can understand etc.

    (:

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  11. can elaborate points further

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  12. I feel that you should elaborate more on your points on how to cope with stress. (:

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  13. The repetition in sentance structure is powerful:D

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  14. very nice repitition..but try to give some more suggestions on how to cope in a proper way,maybe like seeing a counsellor or something.

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  15. The repitition was good but could have included more emotive words in your speech.

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  16. ZHENGYAO:
    the repetition is great.
    and i think you can write about the reasons why ppl should do that or should not do that.



    RATANA:

    I think that It really depends on who's the speaker to relay this speech. If Barack Obama were to do it himself, I'm sure the repetitive part would have a little sense of humour in it. And it'll be able to attract greater attention of people. (:

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  17. Good repetition. But should also use emotive words.

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  18. It is a good try to use repition.But I think you are using it to repeat some simple things and it is a bit boring while reading it.

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  19. cherlyn and michelleAugust 17, 2009 at 8:45 PM

    Good repetition. use more emotive words. elaborate more.

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